Peer feedback on The Final Piece

1) Describe the type of camera work. Which has been used. Do you think it's effective? Why?
Point of view, long shot, pan, over the shoulder. The pan wasn't clear, jumpy, couldn't see the girl easily. With the over the shoulder shot in the mirror it wasn't as jumpy as it could be.
2) What type of sound has been used? Does it work with the visuals? How?
Minimum use of sound at end made it creepy and sad to show emotion of the girl.
3) How has the mise-en-scene construction had an impact on the thriller genre?
Location- at school, teenagers worked well
Props- car
Costume- dark and for girl, clearly dead, makes her seem pale.
Lighting- low lighting in bathroom when she was in mirror.
4) What editing techniques have been use?
Not a lot. Boy running after ball cut was effective. Cut on to girl in mirror with boy
5) Can you think of any constructive criticism?
Could have cut back on mirror and she was gone. Shot was too quick not jumpy enough.
6) what was the most effective element of the production?
Car crash and mise-en-scene.

Peer feedback on The final piece

1.Describe the type of camera work which has been used, do you think its effective and why?
There is an interesting use of mirrors to disorintate audience of reality and fiction.


2.What type of sound has been used? does it work with the visuals, how?
The music used relates to the protagonists emotional state ' if a bit over the top'


3.How was the mise-en-scene construction impact on the thriller genre?
the use of shots that show the protagonist of the centre convey instability.

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5.Can you think of any constructive cristisims?
smoother music transitions

6.What was the most effective element of the production?
camera work

Feedback ting

 Feedback for our opening sequence.
    
1)

  - Long shot
  - Over the shoulder
  - Very effective when showing the dead girl watching the two boys.

2)

 - Cuts between two songs
 - Ambient sound and dialogue
 - The music in the car worked well

3)

 - Disabled toilets seemed out of place

4)

 - Blood on hands
 - Black and white
 - person getting run over

5)

 - Music and scene in the car seemed out of synch and out of keeping with the rest of the sequence.

6)

 - The blood on the hands of Cameron and the 'washing hand' scene.

Credits

For our credits we used transition and a consistent font. The credits included are:

• starring
• filmed by
• directed by
• executive producer

The credits appear on the picture without any transitions as we found this more effective than fading the credits in

Marking criteria

Video - 60 marks. 

Level one - up to 23 marks.

Level two - 24 - 35 marks. Basic ability.

Level three - 36 - 47 marks. Proficient ability.

Level four - 48 - 60 marks. Excellence ability.

• 1. Where appropriate use a steady shot to avoid confusion for the audience.
• 1. Framing a shot including and excluding elements.
• 1. Using a variety of shot distances, angles and types.
• 1. Shooting material appropriate to the task.
• 1. No swearing.
• 1. No young children.
• 1. Selecting the mise-en-scene.
• 1. Editing so that the meaning of the piece is apparent and clear to the audience.
• 1. Using various shot transitions and effects to add to add emphasis where needed.
• 1. Clear dialogue.
• 1. Using titles appropriately - film credits, title - make it interesting and to the point.
     

Changes to colour in film

When Amar gave his feed back he asked us to make it clearer that the scene after Anna is hit is a different day other than just writing saying "24 hours later". He suggested that we put in a clip of the boys getting in the clip the next day but we didn't have any clips like that as we hadn't thought of it. Instead we experimented with a few things to show a different day through effects;

• Fade out, long black pause, fade in to next scene
• The colour sepia
• Black and white

The first option, in our opinions, didn't really show a new day as before we had faded out then in really quickly, the only difference was the black screen for a few seconds longer.

The colour sepia looked good and showed the audience that something was different. The only problem was that it didn't give the right impression, and as there was 2 different sepia settings, they were all different shades, even when we tried to change them.

We then tried black and white which worked better. Black and white was good at showing the audience that something bad had happened which was that Anna had died. Also, there was no shade differences and it put a feeling of gloom over the second half of the opening.

Amar's Feedback

Amar had a look at our opening sequence and gave us some feedback to help make our opening sequence better.

 His first suggestion was change they way that we introduce the next day because it didn't create the right effect with just the text on the screen. He said that we should add in a clip of the boys getting in the car or add making the rest of the sequence different from the the car crash part.

Another suggestion was to change the toilet scene and make it look like Cameron can feel that someone is there but not actually being able to see them. This then creates a different feel to the opening sequence. The audience watching will know that someone is there but he wont, it then keeps Cameron in the dark and gets him more freaked out.

And finally he suggested that we cut some clips out of the football scene to make it more creepy and affective with the genre type as we had a lot of seeing Anna just staring at the boys which we thought at first created suspense for the audience to make it seem like something bad was going to happen to the boys soon. We then realised that we could create the same effect with less of Anna as it's the boys playing football and kicking it over near Anna that we needed to concentrate on.